The young writer’s Thursday

Today’s TBT is the picture of a young writer…’s work:

Laurie 1967 essay

English descriptive paragraph

Laurie Richardson

Nov. 21, 1967

San Francisco, as I last saw it, was enough to stir the heart of any native Californian. The scene was movingly beautiful. I can remember it as if I saw it just yesterday. It was from the freeway leaving the city, looking down through the tall, intricately woven expansion of the Golden Gate Bridge. The angular outlines of the downtown buildings were softened by a light gray fog. The mist cleared over the water, letting the morning sun shine down onto the bay. Alcatraz, forboding [sic] yet lonely, protruded from the clear surface of the blue gray water. An ocean liner slowly made its way past the tiny sailboats on its journey to the ocean. The scene slowly disappeared behind the hills surrounding the bay. The last things to be hidden from sight were the tall, proud pillars of that beautiful bridge.

To which the teacher remarked:

I think the word selection (angular, intricately woven, etc.)

is what takes this beyond the real of “good” to “quality” communication.

A

My mother saved this, throughout many moves.

Comments

  1. I really like all of the pictures from TBT. But this is the coolest thing I’ve seen – even aside from the grade!

  2. Merrily Taylor says:

    An astute teacher, Laurie, and a mother much like my own for saving Treasures. After my mother passed and I was cleaning out the family house, I found all the letters I’d written her from college, not to mention all my old check registers (!?). Even more important, she saved all my favorite children’s books, including my beloved Albert Payson Terhune dog books – I still have them!
    Clearly your talent manifested itself at an early age….

  3. scottygrrl says:

    How beautiful that is – concrete evidence that you had the gift at a young age!

  4. Louise Chambers says:

    Lovely. So descriptive. Amazing that it followed you through all of the moves.

  5. I love your writing, and the teacher comments . . . so glad your mother saved it.

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